Many reviewers and excellent comments on the paper  leading to improvements on the paper.  Many discussions needed going forward, further work.

Continuing the discussion: Overcoming Harms_Further Discussion Document, initially including detailed and thought provoking commentary from Jill Bamforth.

Progress against ToDo's

•  take out the moon analogy, Thank you Phil Wolff 
•  move frameworks to appendix & trim
•  simplify and clarify text
•  improve exec summary so that it is a 2min useful read - 
•  remember to add in Pyrou's Dusun people case study
•  draw out the flip side of benefits
•  add business case (Phil Wolff )  Important point about the commercial so-what, Nicky Hickman noted that harms are costs, a similar question to  Michael Becker who asked for thoughts on an article Personal Data Damages: A Reflection on Major vs Micro Concussions

 "A colleague asked me a question today "do you have a personal data harms stat that you can share that will help me shake up an executive? A stat that is so blatantly damaging that it will compel them to invest in the development of personal information management solutions and lean into being a personal information economy leader." 

Harms are costs: they cost businesses billions in customer services, abuse management systems, security, fraud management, reputational damage and opportunity cost. At the same time they cost every public purse billions mopping up the after-effects e.g. healthcare, benefits, national cybersecurity, ... As soon as that senior exec realises that the microharms not only impact his bonus, but also his taxes your friend will have his attention!

•  change PEST to PESTLE adding in environmental and legal categories (Jill Bamforth)
•  Glossary and definitions (in progress, see below)
•  References tidy and x-check
•  Github vs Gdocs and required publication routes
•  writing a blog post
•  Video and readiness for IIW session - volunteer from Neil Thomson to host session if no others more closely involved with the work volunteer.